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Menacing eyes,
Cruel smiles,
Hurtful words,
All of them aimed directly at me.

I roam the corridors all alone,
Dragging my head towards the tiled floor,
Not daring to lift my head up,
In fear that I may be mocked once again.

Endless tears,
Countless pains,
Discouraging truths,
Why am I doing this to myself?

I look in mirror with disgust,
Wondering why I was created this way,
I can't keep lying to myself,
Can't keep saying I love my life when I don't.
Well, I wrote this piece in about 10 minutes.
I wanted to show how a person can be both bullied by others and by themselves without directly saying it.

comments are welcome, so let me know what you think.

Enjoy!
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ShayHart Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I can really sense your mood in this piece. Some poems/writing it's all just words with no meaning but you can just feel the raw emotion in this. I love it (: you should write more stuff like this!
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Chrisy21 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
omg wow, thank you SO MUCH!!!
I really, really appreciate your beautiful comments. i'm glad to see that others think I have potential. Thank you, your comment means the world to me.
I'll do my best to write more, thank you. :D
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ShayHart Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome (: I know how it feels even though I write fan fictions more than poems. But that doesn't mean I don't know good writing when I see it (:
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Chrisy21 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
Aww, thank you again, you're too sweet.
Here,s something for you, :hug:
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ShayHart Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh thank you!
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Chrisy21 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
you,re welcome. :D
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Sparia Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student General Artist
I really like the tone, and the diction( because its simple and direct you are not trying to be fancy) over all well written on a sensitive topic :)
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Chrisy21 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
awww, thank you so much.
I really appreciate your comment, it's only going to push me to become a better writer.
Thank you. :D
And thanks for the fav. :D
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Sparia Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student General Artist
ah dnt mention it. as a writer my self. I know how much it counts :)
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MarMicheal Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
short but powerful. if this is the beginning where is the end? you said you are pass this so lets hear it. =-)) this would be good to post so others beinging bullied can see that they can get past it.
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Chrisy21 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
hehe, you really are making me blush. I might end up writing something to show you where I am today. (just for you ;) )
haha, I agree with you, I hope many people can get the opportunity to read this. And I really hope it will help them. :D
Thank you again for your wonderful comments. :D
I really appreciate it. :D
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MarMicheal Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
np, you do need to write a continuation of this and post it to some site for bullied students so they can see that it can work out
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Chrisy21 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
haha, I'll see what I can manage. I was actually thinking of writing something to show how happy I am because of all the wonderful people I met. you know to show that even though there are many "bad" people out there, there will always be great people to compensate and make you feel special.
I'll probably do that next weekend.
Thank you again. :D
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MarMicheal Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
np dontr force it let to show when you are ready
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Chrisy21 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
hehe, don't worry, I don,t force anything out. I've been wanting to write this for awhile but I haven't found the time yet and I'm still not in that writing mood. My heart will know when the time is right. :D
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KittySib Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
So true! Intense and well written!:D
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Chrisy21 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012
Thank you very much.
I'm glad you think so and I'm glad you like it.
And thanks for the fav. :D
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KittySib Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!:D
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Applemac12 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Very touching! I really hope this is not based on personal experience!!!!!! :cries:
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Chrisy21 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012
Thank you.
although, I'm sorry to say that it is based on personal experience.
But everything is all better nowadays. :D
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Applemac12 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Oh I am so sorry Chrisy! I despise bullies - they are the biggest cowards in the world! :(
I know I've only just met you but I can already see how special and lovely you are so don't you ever let anyone make you feel small o.k!!!!! :hug: You're really lovely Chrisy and I'm very proud and happy to call you my friend! :heart: :cuddle:
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Chrisy21 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012
AWWW, omg you're killing me. You're SO SWEET.
Ya, the emotions that I portrayed in this piece have been bottled up inside me for a long time and I started to write poems not long ago and I decided it's the best way to spill out all my emotions.
Thank you for your beautiful comments, I REALLY DO appreciate them and I'm even more flattered to be your friend Vin. :D
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Applemac12 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I'm just being honest!!!! :heart:
That's really good Chrisy - poetry is an EXCELLENT way to deal with issues and get them off your chest! It's never good to keep anything bottled up I can tell you! :no:
You are VERY welcome and the honor is all mine Chrisy! :bow:
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Chrisy21 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012
Thank you very much. :D
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Applemac12 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
You bet! :hug:
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