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Menacing eyes,
Cruel smiles,
Hurtful words,
All of them aimed directly at me.

I roam the corridors all alone,
Dragging my head towards the tiled floor,
Not daring to lift my head up,
In fear that I may be mocked once again.

Endless tears,
Countless pains,
Discouraging truths,
Why am I doing this to myself?

I look in mirror with disgust,
Wondering why I was created this way,
I can't keep lying to myself,
Can't keep saying I love my life when I don't.
Well, I wrote this piece in about 10 minutes.
I wanted to show how a person can be both bullied by others and by themselves without directly saying it.

comments are welcome, so let me know what you think.

Enjoy!
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ShayHart Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I can really sense your mood in this piece. Some poems/writing it's all just words with no meaning but you can just feel the raw emotion in this. I love it (: you should write more stuff like this!
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Chrisy21 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
omg wow, thank you SO MUCH!!!
I really, really appreciate your beautiful comments. i'm glad to see that others think I have potential. Thank you, your comment means the world to me.
I'll do my best to write more, thank you. :D
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ShayHart Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome (: I know how it feels even though I write fan fictions more than poems. But that doesn't mean I don't know good writing when I see it (:
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Chrisy21 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
Aww, thank you again, you're too sweet.
Here,s something for you, :hug:
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ShayHart Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh thank you!
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Chrisy21 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
you,re welcome. :D
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Sparia Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student General Artist
I really like the tone, and the diction( because its simple and direct you are not trying to be fancy) over all well written on a sensitive topic :)
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Chrisy21 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
awww, thank you so much.
I really appreciate your comment, it's only going to push me to become a better writer.
Thank you. :D
And thanks for the fav. :D
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Sparia Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student General Artist
ah dnt mention it. as a writer my self. I know how much it counts :)
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MarMicheal Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
short but powerful. if this is the beginning where is the end? you said you are pass this so lets hear it. =-)) this would be good to post so others beinging bullied can see that they can get past it.
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